As I open the closet door something makes me stand there. I was stunned. I had found a secret hallway. Wow, this is a weird house. Wait, where is everyone else?! I yell out for my friends, and then comes stiff screams of pain.
I hear more. Coming from down the stairs. I call out again. And hear a loud scraping noise. I jolt back to life, and make a run for the front door. I hear footsteps and start to run faster. I see a plain black figure. Walking towards me.
I can hear it moaning, moaning ‘HELP ME!’I quickly sidestep the thing and crash to the floor. I had been tripped by something. I get up and start to run again. Then out of nowhere My best friend jumps out and screams out BOO!!!!!! I fall to the ground and start crying. I’m never going to trust my friends again.
By Mario.M
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